Kia ora, I am a student at St Francis of Assisi School, Welcome - Haere Mai. This is a place where I will be able to share my learning with you. Please note my work may include spelling or other errors because some of it will be my first drafts. I would like to get your feedback - comments, thoughts, questions and ideas to help me Learn Create Share.
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Tuesday, December 17, 2019
Summer learning journey Day 2 , Week 1 , Activity 2
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Kia ora Dakota, this is Kieryn from the Summer Learning Journey.
ReplyDeleteKa pai on creating this poem about being Neil Armstrong on the moon! You really envisioned yourself as an astronaut and this has resulted in a great poem!
Have you ever imagined what it would be like to walk on the moon with no gravity?
I imagine that it would be the same feeling you get when you walk through water. It feels light, yet heavy at the same time, and it seems as though you could just float away, yet you are still weighed down.
You mentioned in your poem that there was a subtle movement on the moon. What made this subtle movement? It would be awesome if you could reply to this comment and let me know!
In the last line of your poem, you have written “When I got back there was self-improvement on how to be an astronaut”.
Why is this? Were there some things this astronaut needed to work on?
Nga mihi